Thursday, 11 November 2010

Magpie 40

Gods.

Legs of a skater
face of a rat
Crown of a king
and tail of a cat.

So was the god
of one ancient race
Now an adornment;
a stylish necklace.



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36 comments:

  1. I think I knew him

    loved your slant rhyme
    ..no end to your talent

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  2. This is too cute. I love the ending "neck-lace". Happy Birthday, my friend!

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  3. Loved this, like Suz, I think I knew a guy like that once, definitely the 'face of a rat' triggered some memories.

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  4. Like Brigid and Suz (maybe like all women?) I knew a guy like that. Very well done. I like it.
    I also like the cartoon in the post below it. Cracked me up.
    -- K

    Kay, Alberta, Canada
    An Unfittie's Guide to Adventurous Travel

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  5. I am reading John Irving's "A Son Of The Circus" ... set primarily in India ...many references to the Hindu Monkey God. Beautifully written ~ as always Mr. Ray.

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  6. Short, precise and utterly charming!

    -Sandra Rönnlöv

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  7. This has a quality of an incantation..so crisp and visual..love it!

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  8. great words, skimmed of clutter, simply details.

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  9. Very cute it has a lovely flow to it and it gave me a giggle, thanks for sharing!

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  10. India gave us a lot, and continues
    to do so for those who pay attention.
    Nice work here, good eye, and a
    nice tangent to Willow's piece.

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  11. From a god to an accessory...well, at least he's still immortal. Like your Potluck entry, this is also a very clever piece of work. It made me join Magpie, too! :)

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  12. another award winning tale.

    face of a rat,
    tail of a cat,

    love these lines.
    xx

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  13. ... couldn't resist ~ the cat ate the rat!

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  14. Essence of poem, condensed like Campbells soup!

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  15. You can say that again, Stafford!
    But being an Indian, I can tell ya, he is still adored... IMMENSELY too! :)

    A darned cool verse nonetheless!!
    Rene's comment was too good!! hehe

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  16. Oh, this is too perfect! :) When I saw this prompt my mind went totally blank so thought I'd cheat and click some posts at random to get some inspiration. Well, after this there is no way I'm going to write a Magpie this week. Nothing I could write would be half as good as this. Teach me to cheat!

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  17. So be it with all of us...except I'll never be on a necklace. (if it were to look like that one, I must consider myself lucky)

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  18. Ah so many different faces ..one being a rat...bkm

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  19. Happy Birthday... cute take on a difficult prompt. One I found rather challenging.

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  20. succinctly brilliant, Stafford.

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  21. Is it your birthday!?
    Oh Stafford....happy birthday
    I am so happy I met you
    truly a star in the human race of writers
    you are a dear....bless your mom too

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  22. In this case, ironically, "The Reason You Come" may have it right -- 'gods.' (Small 'g'.)

    Mentioned a "blogging break" in comments over at
    www.getinthehotspot.com
    (She has just launched a book, you know.)

    Oh, taking a blogging break here while working on my credentials as an "established scholar" -- to qualify for a Vatican library card.

    Happy belated birthday, my friend (source: Willow's comment above). Your writing wrocks

    !!

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  23. Crisp one- Stafford Dear.. :)
    And Many Happy wishes for the year ahead and always.. :)

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  24. Glad to visit you today
    We treasure your input at our group poetry efforts and would be thrilled to see you again this coming Monday.
    Any poem is acceptable, simply share and enjoy...
    Keep writing, Keep inspiring!
    xoxox

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  25. Says a lot in a short, well-written way.

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  26. Nice one Staffo! Is it really your birthday? Tessa's was yesterday (8 years old)- 12th November.

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  27. Very cleverly done. I like it!

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  28. Yes like this one Stafford. Like how you got that rhyme going in the second stanza: race and necklace.
    PS Hubris lives!

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  29. Love this Stafford....brilliantly woven!
    :-)

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  30. that was magical. A lot of fun and I love the way you laced your words together :)

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