Friday, 3 February 2012

Bluebell 55 word challenge.

The Car God.


As it approached we ran to see what was pushing it, but saw nothing.
It had a voice, a rumbling; a language of no words as it carried the holy man, keeper of its demons.
In wonder and fear, we dedicated our lives to its mysteries.
But we should have burnt it.

Written for Bluebell Books.
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8 comments:

  1. Steve Isaak3 February 2012 at 9:53 am

    Love this - great, borderline-poetic piece, my friend!

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  2. Maxwell Mead Williams Robinson Barry3 February 2012 at 10:26 am

    a surprise to see you in, smiles.

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  3. Anonymous3 February 2012 at 1:40 pm

    and it is a god to many - love this piece Stafford - I agree.

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  4. Deborah3 February 2012 at 5:58 pm

    Worshipped by many ... very good! :o)

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  5. hyperCRYPTICal4 February 2012 at 12:39 am

    I remember a discussion we had in class in the good old days - it was regarding how alien visitors might view a car and it was of our teachers opionion that it might be viewed as a god...

    It is a pity that the idea of motorised transport was not burned at design stage.

    Anna :o]

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  6. Kathe W.7 February 2012 at 1:04 am

    interesting-wonder what life would be like-probably a lot simpler, healthier perhaps? Surely a lot less people over-populating the poor planet.

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  7. Wander11 February 2012 at 5:21 pm

    I liked your 55, well put together, thank you

    Wander

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  8. Elizena24 February 2012 at 4:01 pm

    Loved it! Made me imagine how I would react if I'd seen a moving horse carriage for the first time with nothing pulling it and then I looked at all the cars driving willy nilly around me and I had to agree with the last line. LOL! Very well done in 55. Be blessed.

    http://elizena-lovingmycreator.blogspot.com/2012/02/soul-song.html

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